The completion of Writing 201 was never to be the end of my poetic education. There will never be enough to learn, I wanted more. There is a wide range of tools that can claim my personal poetic arsenal as home, and I welcome them willingly, Its an incredible exercise in growth.. I made the acquaintance of the Villanelle at my first poetry workshop, Its a 19 line form that has 2 refrains inserted in particular portions of the piece, see if you can spot them. I would like to see more villanelles, the repetition was a tricky, but fun feature to implement. Here is mine, I hope I see yours too.
They pressed a promise to my palm, those nimble fingers, Miss Elaine,
Teased away the seething tumult, seeding sense to slay decay,
Miss Elaine, you’ve lent a hand that led my hopes away from pain.
Time has taught you tenderness, time and time again you’ve slain,
the numbing rein of doubt and angst, your golden touch has saved my days,
They pressed a promise to my palm, those nimble fingers, Miss Elaine.
Through every annum we faced as one, your warm embrace was my refrain
Those shallow grooves that trace your palm have funnelled happiness my way
Miss Elaine, you’ve lent a hand that led my hopes away from pain.
I stood beside you, at an alter your hands had forged for us to claim.
Forged with trust, your fingers crushed all uncertainty away,
They pressed a promise to my palm, those nimble fingers, Miss Elaine.
The seamless mould of interlocking calm, intimately framed
palms, claimed a couple, cupping hearts and slaying greys.
Miss Elaine you’ve lent a hand that led my hopes away from pain.
You saw the calluses in my character that taught the world to wield disdain,
and chose the strange approach, you stayed and washed the resin of hapless waves,
They pressed a promise to my palm, those nimble fingers, Miss Elaine,
Miss Elaine you’ve lent a hand that led my hopes away from pain.
(c) Saili Katebe
Great job! This is one that I have NEVER attempted! Lol!
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Give it a try! It’s quite interesting to work out.
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Haha! We shall see. I’ll have to find a block of several hours to carve out to attempt it! Lol!
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It’s finding the time, you sound like a busy lady, I hope you find some time
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I have never heard of the Villanelle before. Am I reading too much into th poem because I read about Lent and its affects, all over. Forgive me.
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What was it you were getting from the piece?
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That the writer is speaking of their experience during the Lent season, including communion and mediation.
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