Writing 201, Assignment 4: Concrete Poem


Writing 201 has added a dash of heartache to the days feast of poetic prompts, devices and forms. Day Four has requested a Concrete poem, based on the prompt “Animal” utilising enjambment.

I wake up every morning excited to read the days assignment, I look forward to  toying with ideas for the piece in the spare moments the day provides. I found myself lost in panic today, every time I turned to planning my contribution mind froze. Fortunately all things come to an end, the panic ran its course. It faded away to a whispers and gifted me some peace of mind and a slither of time to fumble a piece into existence, a freewrite. Bravo to the folks at The Daily Post, today was truly a challenge. I had no idea how to share the image, I am not the most technologically competent person, so here is a screenshot of the finished product.Today I was truly tested! Enjoy

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17 thoughts on “Writing 201, Assignment 4: Concrete Poem

  1. The poem has that hungry, stalking quality to it. It felt ominous.
    I don’t see the image you were going for. I don’t have the best eye mind you. 🙂
    It was a tough challenge and you did well! Bravo! 🙂 Phew, I wonder what tomorrow will bring…

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      1. I freestyled it all. I didn’t want to let the days challenge go unanswered. In hindsight it makes sense that the tree is the spectator of the hustle and bustle of the African plains.

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  2. Your poem conveys some powerful imagery of wildlife; predator and prey. I read the comments regarding the image of the tree, and I love the idea that it is the observer of the content of the poem. This was a challenging exercise, but I think you came up with an amazing “concrete” piece, both visually and poetically.

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      1. I think it’s one of those that it’s obvious what it is once you’ve read the poem. I couldn’t quite figure it out at first, but after reading the poem, I got it and it was amazing 🙂

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  3. Wonderful! I loved, “Whispering hooves that have littered the dusty plains.” I too, had trouble identifying your image. I guess the above photo threw me off a bit as well. I had a LOT of trouble with this one! Good job!

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    1. I’m glad you liked it. I struggle to think of a way to share the image, I usually post from my phone on the go, so formatting paragraphs that way would be a tough ask. It really did test me but I liked that. Today’s challenge was a nice challenge as we’ll. can’t wait to read your contribution for it 🙂

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  4. It really does look like a tree. It shows that you put in a lot of time and effort on this. And as I read it, I could see the tree watching the animals. Thanks for a good concrete poem.


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