Writing 201, Assignment 4: Concrete Poem


Writing 201 has added a dash of heartache to the days feast of poetic prompts, devices and forms. Day Four has requested a Concrete poem, based on the prompt “Animal” utilising enjambment.

I wake up every morning excited to read the days assignment, I look forward to  toying with ideas for the piece in the spare moments the day provides. I found myself lost in panic today, every time I turned to planning my contribution mind froze. Fortunately all things come to an end, the panic ran its course. It faded away to a whispers and gifted me some peace of mind and a slither of time to fumble a piece into existence, a freewrite. Bravo to the folks at The Daily Post, today was truly a challenge. I had no idea how to share the image, I am not the most technologically competent person, so here is a screenshot of the finished product.Today I was truly tested! Enjoy

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17 thoughts on “Writing 201, Assignment 4: Concrete Poem

  1. The poem has that hungry, stalking quality to it. It felt ominous.
    I don’t see the image you were going for. I don’t have the best eye mind you. 🙂
    It was a tough challenge and you did well! Bravo! 🙂 Phew, I wonder what tomorrow will bring…

    1. I settled on a completely obscure attempt presenting a tree, this was truly a battle for me, I can’t wait to see tomorrow’s challenge.

      1. Ah! So I was right. I saw the tree but then thought you were going for a predator so I must be blind. It’s a lovely Acacia. I heard Africa calling. 🙂

      2. I freestyled it all. I didn’t want to let the days challenge go unanswered. In hindsight it makes sense that the tree is the spectator of the hustle and bustle of the African plains.

  2. Your poem conveys some powerful imagery of wildlife; predator and prey. I read the comments regarding the image of the tree, and I love the idea that it is the observer of the content of the poem. This was a challenging exercise, but I think you came up with an amazing “concrete” piece, both visually and poetically.

      1. I think it’s one of those that it’s obvious what it is once you’ve read the poem. I couldn’t quite figure it out at first, but after reading the poem, I got it and it was amazing 🙂

  3. Wonderful! I loved, “Whispering hooves that have littered the dusty plains.” I too, had trouble identifying your image. I guess the above photo threw me off a bit as well. I had a LOT of trouble with this one! Good job!

    1. I’m glad you liked it. I struggle to think of a way to share the image, I usually post from my phone on the go, so formatting paragraphs that way would be a tough ask. It really did test me but I liked that. Today’s challenge was a nice challenge as we’ll. can’t wait to read your contribution for it 🙂

  4. It really does look like a tree. It shows that you put in a lot of time and effort on this. And as I read it, I could see the tree watching the animals. Thanks for a good concrete poem.

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