Another brilliant blogging U by the wonderful team at Daily post. With the prompt for the day being “water”, I had to whip up a Haiku, and throwing in a simile for good measure. Enjoy!
Heaven opens up,
It bleeds, Like broken mirrors.
Earth surrenders thirst!
Love your writing style, especially “Earth surrenders thirst. Well done!
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Thanks you very much! 🙂
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You have done a great job here! I especially love the last line! Great personification! I’ve taken 3 poetry courses at the University of Tampa where I recently got my BA in writing with a minor in professional & technical writing. However, my favorite was Poetry II where we didn’t have to use rhyme or meter, lol. I’m more of a creative nonfiction gal, but thought this could be fun. 😉 Have fun! I look forward to reading more of your poems! Blessings!
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Very nice!! Congratulations on BA!! You must love the art. Daily post have great ways to get us all writing and trying new things this will definitely be fun. I look forward to seeing more of your work! Gonna swing by your page and have a gander.
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Thank you! I just started not too long ago, lol.
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Powerful imagery. It reminds me of an epic scene in a historical drama.
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Thank you very much. I’m glad you liked it. The haiku can be a tricky form
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Very Tricky, I definitely agree ;).
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I love the last line!
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Thank you. Fumbled my way into a haiku here
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Your words say alot and mean even more!
You have covered so much about life in this!
Great..:)
Hope to connect with you…(I too love writing poems)
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Thank you, I really appreciate the feedback from a fellow lover of poetry. 🙂
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Look forward to read more:)
Hope we connect
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The whole “bleeds like broken mirrors” resonates with me because I have that same sort of picture in my head. I like that imagery a lot. Good job!
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Thanks! 🙂 I give in to the Radom images my mind associates with the concepts, phrases and objects. Paid off this time :)l
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I think that’s one of the reasons I like haiku. First impressions random as they are, are the truest response to something. ‘Course I could be all wet.
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If this was your first attempt at haiku it was excellent!
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Thank you very much. This isn’t my first attempt, this is my second time at it. First ever shared. I’m glad it came across alright.
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Well get out there and share those puppies and build your muscles up! We’re waiting to read them.
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I like this, it evokes a nice sense of how painful bleeding can be, it’s a really good but not at all obvious simile.
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Yeah, the simile came in from the distant left field. But I chanced it. I’m glad you liked it
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Still thinking about your haiku. In some ways it’s like a person who has been confronted with who or how they really are. That realization has broken upon them and the fallout is thousands of mirrors where they can see themselves for who they are raining down on their head. Finally, unable to fend off reality any longer, they surrender to the truth they see in the mirrors.
You probably didn’t mean it that way, but it kept working in my head till that’s the picture I got!
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That’s a really interesting insight into it. That’s what amazes me about haiku, it’s so brief but can contain such depth. That’s a a very thought provoking look at the piece. Really appreciate you sharing, and I’m really glad the piece was able to stick with you
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It evokes powerful images of thirst slaked! great thought process!
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Thank you very much. I had to rake my mind raw to encapsulate that image of water in the haiku. I’m glad you enjoyed it
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Wow! I’ll be clicking the follow button now 🙂
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🙂 thank you very much I’m glad you’re enjoying the page
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You’re welcome. I look forward to reading more!
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